What’s your favorite breakfast?
I like to break my fast with scrambled eggs. I don’t want any fluff for breakfast, not that silly rabbit’s Trix in it’s bright pink package or its friend the chocolate puffs.
Nope. I love the aroma of scrambled eggs freshly fluffed.
I can imagine the morning now. I pull out the medium glass bowl, the middle bowl of the turquoise pyrex set Scott’s mom had.
I reach for the medium-sized frying pan and toss in a pad of butter, turning the heat up to just below medium high.
I crack open one egg and gently let it plop into the bowl. I repeat with one more egg. Then I add an egg and a half of cream. What’s an egg and a half? I imagine how much cream would fill an egg shell, that’s what. With a small wisk, I whip the eggs fluffy.
Now the choices. I choose a handful of shredded mozzarella cheese — the real stuff too, not “light.” I sprinkle in about a tablespoon of dill weed and a half teaspoon of tarragon. I slowly stir those in with the mess of eggs, just as the butter begins to sizzle in the pan.
Carefully, I pour from the bowl so the fluff of eggs just slip across the pan, sizzling a song the yellow mass can dance to while I return to the fridge for the last item: whipped cream cheese. I scoop a dollop and drop it onto the eggs in the center. I repeat four more times around that center dollop, and them begin to swish up the eggs with a wooden spoon to finish the scramble, smooth, not lumpy.
I swish the scrambles out of the pan and onto plates, topped with two sprigs of chives. The aroma wafts up as I bring the plates to the breakfast table. Salt is added then to taste. “Mmmm,” Scott mumbles as he sprinkles his salt.
Now that’s a good morning, where all the secret choices scrambled together create a wonderful and pleasing effect. It’s rather like the classroom, when the small choices allowed in kids’ learning allow each student the chance to scramble up ideas and skills on their terms, becoming focused on making just the write word choices. The sizzle in the classroom sharing those choices are not fluff, but are the stuff of engaged authors, a wonderful and pleasing effect for all of us.
What about your breakfast? Does its secrets motivate your day?
My writing choices:
Description Sight: “I pull out the medium glass bowl, the middle bowl of the turquoise pyrex set Scott’s mom had.”
Description Sound: “the butter begins to sizzle in the pan.”
Details: I like to break my fast with scrambled eggs. I don’t want any fluff for breakfast, not that silly rabbit’s Trix in it’s bright pink package or its friend the chocolate puffs.
Dialogue: “‘Mmmm,’ Scott mumbles as he sprinkles his salt.”
Alliteration/Consonance [m and s]: “‘Mmmm,’ Scott mumbles as he sprinkles his salt.”
And did you notice how I expanded the idea into the classroom? How I compared the choices in my scrambled eggs and its culinary delight to the choices made by students and their sharing and engagement.
What writing choices do you see?